public speaking in organization

public speaking in organization

public speaking

Name: Tomia Willingham

Course: Public Speaking

Assessment: Touchstone 3

File: WIN_20210404_10_00_26_Pro.mp4

Touchstone 3 Rubric and Feedback
Rubric Category Feedback Score
Organization Speech structure meets all requirements; however, some support is missing, or one element of Monroe’s Motivated Sequence is not represented. 20/25

Acceptable

Persuasive Speech takes a stance on an issue and the arguments and approach are primarily persuasive in nature.  

15/20

Acceptable

Use of Appeals Only uses two kinds of appeals 12/20

Needs Improvement

Balance of Appeals Uses one type of appeal effectively, however the other appeals are underused, used ineffectively, or absent. 12/20

Needs Improvement

Language Language is frequently unclear or inconsistent with the audience and often fails to help the audience connect with the speaker or the topic. 10/20

Needs Improvement

 

Tomia,

 

It is not clear what your thesis is in this speech, other than the broad claim that institutional racism can be addressed by reforming the education system. You mention the last names of Shirley Ann Tate and Paul Bagguley who, I found out, have written on this topic.

Other than that, there were no source citations, use of visual supports, or a persuasive call to action. You stated these author’s opinions as if they were facts, without offering the arguments they made in support of these claims. These claims clearly have merit, but your appeals to pathos and ethos can be much stronger. So, the appeal to logos is stronger, but pathos is what gets people to listen to and evaluate your arguments. Using charts, pictures and personal testimony can illustrate your points and engage the audience at an emotional level.

Be sure to cite your sources clearly and conclude with some actions you are persuading the audience to take. Use of visual aids is also a requirement of your Unit 4 speech. Finally, the language and delivery of the speech were sometimes difficult to follow and long pauses interrupted the flow of the narrative.

 

It is important you incorporate the feedback and recommendations given here into your next speech, because Improvement counts for 1/3 of the grading points. I look forward to seeing it!

 

Professor Davis

public speaking

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